boulders [first draft! critique please?]

[Okay, so I wrote this last night. It's a songpoemsomethingorother. Not related to real life events, just a random rush of imagination. it's a story about a boy and a girl (obviously). the boy just lost his grandfather. that's why hes in the hospital. this particular boy does not like crying. at all. he thinks its a sign of weakness. All his friends and family left him alone, because that's what this guy normally likes. he's a lonerrrr. Except there's one girl, who happens to be good friends with him and also has a crush on him. She takes it up as her responsibility to be there for him in his hard times; to teach him it's okay to let go and lean on others; and also that he can trust her. He ends up cryin on her shoulder, obviously. Enjoy? ^_^]

She sees you in the hospital
head down, hands clasped before you
it seems you've lost it all
and she's been put there for you

you're glad the room is empty
because you're losing control
cuz when you keep it to yourself
it's hard not to let go

your friends left you alone
thought it'ss what you'd prefer
you might've thought so too...
...if not for her.

sometimes you gotta cry on a shoulder
there are times when you've got a boulder
times when you feel far older
far more weary than you need to feel

cuz she wouldn't leave you alone
not at a time like this
when a man becomes a kid again
there are chances he might miss

and she said I'm here for you
she said that it's okay
just do what you need to do
don't let me get in your way

sometimes you gotta cry on a shoulder
There are times when you've got a boulder
Times when you feel far far older
more weary than you need to feel